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Chapter 1
Hi, this is partially about the first chapter sent over and partially about how to move forward.
There were a few aspects that I wanted feedback on.

  1. If the character relationships are alright so far
  2. Ideas on improving the action
  3. If the dialogue sounds authentic

And I do agree on your note that Jayana shouldn't be a damsel in distress. How do you think we should provide her with the skills to hold her own in battle or at least skirmishes? In her background so far, there is no suggestion that she hasn't led a privileged life. It would have to be something that stands out from her ordinary life. Navjot Mundra 16-05-2020, 23:20 IST

The relationships and dialogue so far are quite on point. I love that you portray Ned as a bit of a rogue. I think that it would be a great idea to find an analog action scene in movies or literature for a given scene and analyze what works in those scenes in order to construct our own. Ultimately we want to contrive as much conflict for our characters as we can. When writing our scenes if we ask ourselves "what else could go wrong?" and write that into the scen I think we will be well on the way of improving action. Terewiki May 16, 2020, at 12:46 PM MDT